poems

[rivster]

was mine good

the one written before marriage?Great!
But how do we rate?Just by quoting the poem and replying?

[SeaGoddess]

was mine good

I already +rep you, check what I've wrote you there

[antonio]

the one written before marriage?Great!
But how do we rate?Just by quoting the poem and replying?

just quote and rate from 1-10 and leave a comment

[rivster]

here we write about poems,and the best poem whill get 10 rep+ from me,also we can rate each others poems from 1 to 10(you can also write haiku if you know)whell this is mine

The Smell of your hair
The taste of your kiss
These are the things
That I will always miss

The sound of your voice
The feel of your hand
They affect me in ways
You could never understand

The love in your heart
The peace in your eyes
They make me feel
Like I want to cry

You are a gift
That God gave to me
And I can just feel
That we are meant to be

I'll love you forever
I hope you do to
For it's only a short while
Before we say "I do"

*i wrote this exaclly 24 hours before my wedding*

great.8/10.More themes would be better.

[antonio]

great.8/10.More themes would be better.

super poem 9/10i loved it but something was missing i dont what but it was missing

[rivster]

My first poem

I love beer
I love girls
that makes me happier
than going to school

funny!Good one,though.Expressing the crowd.7/10.

[rivster]

super poem 9/10i loved it but something was missing i dont what but it was missing

which one?the one about nature?

[rivster]

Endless herds of dreams go by

Broken, black, betrayed.

On a graveyard colored sky

Where the Time lays slayed...

already commented,8.5/10

[rivster]

This is the first post in a forum I have ever made.I have a bit of interest in poems,so,here goes:


The golden rays of the sun knocked on the door,
it may seem weird,but they did,
I went down,as my spirits rose,
and there the sun's rays,me they hit.

Inspired I went out to commune with nature,
Mother nature being the creator of all,
but alas,I was touched and walked with my eyes closed,
to absorb nature's beauty, and banged into a wall.

There,dazed,I sat,nay,fell down,
To what I expected to be nature's soft ground.
Instead,I slumped down to something hard,
it was solid concrete,I painfully found.

Where had Mother nature vanished to?
The soft ground ,the grass,the clean breeze?
All I know is that the concrete jungle,the town,the city,
has had thee,for decades,under siege.




How was it?

I would rate myself 8/10

[mix93]

funny!Good one,though.Expressing the crowd.7/10.

Haha... not bad for a first poem I wrote...