poems

here we write about poems,and the best poem whill get 10 rep+ from me,also we can rate each others poems from 1 to 10(you can also write haiku if you know)whell this is mine

The Smell of your hair
The taste of your kiss
These are the things
That I will always miss

The sound of your voice
The feel of your hand
They affect me in ways
You could never understand

The love in your heart
The peace in your eyes
They make me feel
Like I want to cry

You are a gift
That God gave to me
And I can just feel
That we are meant to be

I'll love you forever
I hope you do to
For it's only a short while
Before we say "I do":):):)

*i wrote this exaclly 24 hours before my wedding*

just one more thing...anything that happend to you or your family fell free to post here:);)

We're not very poetic
We are, however, pathetic

:blink::blink::surrender:

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Originally Posted by Noxide

We're not very poetic
We are, however, pathetic

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:laugh::laugh::laugh:good one

Haikus are easy.

But not all of them make sense.

Refrigerator.

Isnt there like 3 or 4 threads like this.....orwell

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Originally Posted by Paul

Isnt there like 3 or 4 threads like this.....orwell

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i think not:blink:

but here we can vote for each other and there are prizes

1 place-10rep(maybe if its really good 20rep)

2place-7rep

3place-5rep

we all give the exact rep for each place:)

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Originally Posted by James

Haikus are easy.

But not all of them make sense.

Refrigerator.

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i give you a 7 for that not sense:)

Endless herds of dreams go by

Broken, black, betrayed.

On a graveyard colored sky

Where the Time lays slayed...

My first poem :P

I love beer
I love girls
that makes me happier
than going to school :whistle:

:clap::clap::clap::clap:

Noxide Loves Boobies
Boobies Love Noxide
Without Boobies...
There'll Be No Noxide

:P

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Originally Posted by Lemmings

Without Boobies...
There'll Be No Noxide

:P

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There will also not be any females. Which means no procreation. Which means the end of the world. Which means boobies are vital to the survival of our species.

Uh-Oh,the pirates leave
Uh-Oh,one of their girls is Eve....:blink:

This is the first post in a forum I have ever made.I have a bit of interest in poems,so,here goes:


The golden rays of the sun knocked on the door,
it may seem weird,but they did,
I went down,as my spirits rose,
and there the sun's rays,me they hit.

Inspired I went out to commune with nature,
Mother nature being the creator of all,
but alas,I was touched and walked with my eyes closed,
to absorb nature's beauty, and banged into a wall.

There,dazed,I sat,nay,fell down,
To what I expected to be nature's soft ground.
Instead,I slumped down to something hard,
it was solid concrete,I painfully found.

Where had Mother nature vanished to?
The soft ground ,the grass,the clean breeze?
All I know is that the concrete jungle,the town,the city,
has had thee,for decades,under siege.




How was it?

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Originally Posted by rivster

This is the first post in a forum I have ever made.I have a bit of interest in poems,so,here goes:


The golden rays of the sun knocked on the door,
it may seem weird,but they did,
I went down,as my spirits rose,
and there the sun's rays,me they hit.

Inspired I went out to commune with nature,
Mother nature being the creator of all,
but alas,I was touched and walked with my eyes closed,
to absorb nature's beauty, and banged into a wall.

There,dazed,I sat,nay,fell down,
To what I expected to be nature's soft ground.
Instead,I slumped down to something hard,
it was solid concrete,I painfully found.

Where had Mother nature vanished to?
The soft ground ,the grass,the clean breeze?
All I know is that the concrete jungle,the town,the city,
has had thee,for decades,under siege.




How was it?

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Well done. Unlike other attempts, you really do understand art and express it vibrantly!

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Originally Posted by SeaGoddess

Endless herds of dreams go by

Broken, black, betrayed.

On a graveyard colored sky

Where the Time lays slayed...

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Thanks a lot!Your poem,too,was very good.I loved the phrase "graveyard colored sky".

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Originally Posted by SeaGoddess

Well done. Unlike other attempts, you really do understand art and express it vibrantly!

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:baby::baby:was mine good:nerd::nerd:

we seen some good poems but now we have to rate each others to advance in the quarter finals(the best poems have to write a new one):):)

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Originally Posted by antonio

:baby::baby:was mine good:nerd::nerd:

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the one written before marriage?Great!
But how do we rate?Just by quoting the poem and replying?

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Originally Posted by antonio

:baby::baby:was mine good:nerd::nerd:

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I already +rep you, check what I've wrote you there :)

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Originally Posted by rivster

the one written before marriage?Great!
But how do we rate?Just by quoting the poem and replying?

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just quote and rate from 1-10 and leave a comment:)

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Originally Posted by antonio

here we write about poems,and the best poem whill get 10 rep+ from me,also we can rate each others poems from 1 to 10(you can also write haiku if you know)whell this is mine

The Smell of your hair
The taste of your kiss
These are the things
That I will always miss

The sound of your voice
The feel of your hand
They affect me in ways
You could never understand

The love in your heart
The peace in your eyes
They make me feel
Like I want to cry

You are a gift
That God gave to me
And I can just feel
That we are meant to be

I'll love you forever
I hope you do to
For it's only a short while
Before we say "I do":):):)

*i wrote this exaclly 24 hours before my wedding*

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great.8/10.More themes would be better.

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Originally Posted by rivster

great.8/10.More themes would be better.

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super poem 9/10i loved it but something was missing i dont what but it was missing :):):)

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Originally Posted by mix93

My first poem :P

I love beer
I love girls
that makes me happier
than going to school :whistle:

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funny!Good one,though.Expressing the crowd.7/10.

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Originally Posted by antonio

super poem 9/10i loved it but something was missing i dont what but it was missing :):):)

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which one?the one about nature?

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Originally Posted by SeaGoddess

Endless herds of dreams go by

Broken, black, betrayed.

On a graveyard colored sky

Where the Time lays slayed...

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already commented,8.5/10

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Originally Posted by rivster

This is the first post in a forum I have ever made.I have a bit of interest in poems,so,here goes:


The golden rays of the sun knocked on the door,
it may seem weird,but they did,
I went down,as my spirits rose,
and there the sun's rays,me they hit.

Inspired I went out to commune with nature,
Mother nature being the creator of all,
but alas,I was touched and walked with my eyes closed,
to absorb nature's beauty, and banged into a wall.

There,dazed,I sat,nay,fell down,
To what I expected to be nature's soft ground.
Instead,I slumped down to something hard,
it was solid concrete,I painfully found.

Where had Mother nature vanished to?
The soft ground ,the grass,the clean breeze?
All I know is that the concrete jungle,the town,the city,
has had thee,for decades,under siege.




How was it?

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I would rate myself 8/10

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Originally Posted by rivster

funny!Good one,though.Expressing the crowd.7/10.

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Haha... not bad for a first poem I wrote...:D

and we have are quarter finalists!!!

1st-rivster with 9/10:clap::clap::clap:

2nd-sea goddess with 8.5/10:clap::clap::clap:

3rd-antonio(me)with 8/10:clap::clap::clap:

and for 4th place its a TIE!!!between mix93 and james with 7/10:clap::clap:


the quarter finals are OPEN!!!!!!

there will be other contests(if moderators dont delete this thread) so dont worry everyone!!!:):):):):)

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Originally Posted by antonio

there will be other contests(if moderators dont delete this thread) so dont worry everyone!!!:):):):):)

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To us and the thread. Cheers! :cheers:

My second poem! :laugh:

We are drinkin' beer,
We are drinkin' gin,
No matter what's in bottle,
We are drinkin' everything! :drunk:

i have 3 poems

I kept my head up high,
and then you came my way.
I have been hurt so many times.
My heart filled with so much pain.
but now that pain has gone away.
For I have found a place I want to be.
This place I see is with thee.
For in your arms I have felt and seen,
a wonderful feeling that I cannot believe.
A safe haven in your arms just for me.
Now I give my heart to thee.
For my heart believes in you.

and the second

I look deep in your eyes.
I see there what I feel inside.
We share something between us,
Neither one of us can hide.

I feel your lips touch mine,
I loose all my control,
All it took was a look and a kiss,
To know you were part of my soul.

I see your hands on my skin,
I want and need you to do more,
The passionate look you give me,
Tells me heaven is in store.

I feel your need against my thigh,
I know you will fulfill every wish,.
We were made to fit together,
And all it took was a look and a kiss.

I look deep in your eyes,
And I see heaven there inside,
You make me feel so beautiful,
What I feel for you I cannot hide.

and the third

It is Love that gives me purpose
to change and grow and learn.
It is Love that guides me on this path
and helps me choose each turn.

It is Love that gives me courage
to stand against my fears;
to open up my heart to you,
to let you see my tears.

It is Love that gives me trust and hope
when little thing go wrong.
When distance stands between us,
it is Love that keeps me strong.

It is Love that offers harmony
and a friendship that is true.
How wonderful that I can share
a Love like this with you!:):):)

i hope you like them:):):)

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Originally Posted by antonio

i have 3 poems

I kept my head up high,
and then you came my way.
I have been hurt so many times.
My heart filled with so much pain.
but now that pain has gone away.
For I have found a place I want to be.
This place I see is with thee.
For in your arms I have felt and seen,
a wonderful feeling that I cannot believe.
A safe haven in your arms just for me.
Now I give my heart to thee.
For my heart believes in you.

and the second

I look deep in your eyes.
I see there what I feel inside.
We share something between us,
Neither one of us can hide.

I feel your lips touch mine,
I loose all my control,
All it took was a look and a kiss,
To know you were part of my soul.

I see your hands on my skin,
I want and need you to do more,
The passionate look you give me,
Tells me heaven is in store.

I feel your need against my thigh,
I know you will fulfill every wish,.
We were made to fit together,
And all it took was a look and a kiss.

I look deep in your eyes,
And I see heaven there inside,
You make me feel so beautiful,
What I feel for you I cannot hide.

and the third

It is Love that gives me purpose
to change and grow and learn.
It is Love that guides me on this path
and helps me choose each turn.

It is Love that gives me courage
to stand against my fears;
to open up my heart to you,
to let you see my tears.

It is Love that gives me trust and hope
when little thing go wrong.
When distance stands between us,
it is Love that keeps me strong.

It is Love that offers harmony
and a friendship that is true.
How wonderful that I can share
a Love like this with you!:):):)

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WOW!!Loved the last one.Superb.Keep it up.
The first one is better than the second,but both are indeed good.
So,3>1>2.I have some more.Like me to share them?

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Originally Posted by mix93

My second poem! :laugh:

We are drinkin' beer,
We are drinkin' gin,
No matter what's in bottle,
We are drinkin' everything! :drunk:

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Yup!Much better.Repped you.

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Originally Posted by antonio

i have 3 poems

I kept my head up high,
and then you came my way.
I have been hurt so many times.
My heart filled with so much pain.
but now that pain has gone away.
For I have found a place I want to be.
This place I see is with thee.
For in your arms I have felt and seen,
a wonderful feeling that I cannot believe.
A safe haven in your arms just for me.
Now I give my heart to thee.
For my heart believes in you.

and the second

I look deep in your eyes.
I see there what I feel inside.
We share something between us,
Neither one of us can hide.

I feel your lips touch mine,
I loose all my control,
All it took was a look and a kiss,
To know you were part of my soul.

I see your hands on my skin,
I want and need you to do more,
The passionate look you give me,
Tells me heaven is in store.

I feel your need against my thigh,
I know you will fulfill every wish,.
We were made to fit together,
And all it took was a look and a kiss.

I look deep in your eyes,
And I see heaven there inside,
You make me feel so beautiful,
What I feel for you I cannot hide.

and the third

It is Love that gives me purpose
to change and grow and learn.
It is Love that guides me on this path
and helps me choose each turn.

It is Love that gives me courage
to stand against my fears;
to open up my heart to you,
to let you see my tears.

It is Love that gives me trust and hope
when little thing go wrong.
When distance stands between us,
it is Love that keeps me strong.

It is Love that offers harmony
and a friendship that is true.
How wonderful that I can share
a Love like this with you!:):):)

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:clap::clap::clap: :thumbsup:

Poetry is just wannabe rap

:surrender::surrender: