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08-07-2009, 10:58 AM
mix93

Quote:

Originally Posted by rivster

Yup!Much better.Repped you.

Thank you....! :D
08-07-2009, 11:06 AM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noxide

Poetry is just wannabe rap

:surrender::surrender:

maybe,never thought of it that way!:laugh:
08-07-2009, 11:33 AM
antonio

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noxide

Poetry is just wannabe rap

:surrender::surrender:

nah,poetry is for people that are in depresion or in love cuz people expres there felings in gentle songs:)(i studied poetry for 2 years)
08-07-2009, 11:35 AM
rivster

May I share some more poems?
08-07-2009, 11:37 AM
the_dead_man

Quote:

Originally Posted by antonio

nah,poetry is for people that are in depresion or in love cuz people expres there felings in gentle songs:)(i studied poetry for 2 years)

true, but not for people in love or depression, poetry is for everyone.
08-07-2009, 11:42 AM
mix93

Quote:

Originally Posted by antonio

nah,poetry is for people that are in depresion or in love cuz people expres there felings in gentle songs:)(i studied poetry for 2 years)

Hmmm.... from that fact... I'm in love with alcohol ! :laugh:
08-07-2009, 12:04 PM
antonio

Quote:

Originally Posted by the_dead_man

true, but not for people in love or depression, poetry is for everyone.

that is true
08-07-2009, 12:08 PM
antonio

we still have to wait for sea goddess and rivster to add a poem so we can advance to voting each other

the semifinals are on the WWWWWWAAAAAAYYYYY!!!:wow::wow::wow:
08-07-2009, 12:23 PM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by antonio

we still have to wait for sea goddess and rivster to add a poem so we can advance to voting each other

the semifinals are on the WWWWWWAAAAAAYYYYY!!!:wow::wow::wow:

Here's my edition:

Prelude to Life

On the seemingly endless path called life,
I trudge on,pursuing goodness;
Into turbulent waters,I dive,
Avoiding the unvarnished truth with a defiant face.

I know nothing of the truth I avoid,
Neither do I understand it's purpose;
I assure you,it can't be found in any tabloid,
It is not even known by the wise carcass.

Why,oh why can't I comprehend life's circle?
Why,oh why can't I figure out my purpose here?
All I know is that I have to trudge on with a story to tell,
and turn a blind eye to life's leer.

There,that's my entry.
08-07-2009, 01:23 PM
antonio

these poems i wrote are for life(this you cant vote)

I don't understand why they treat us this way,
We are not that different, inside were all the same,
We should not be judged by our religion or the color of our face,
Because in the end, we're all running this same race,

I wake up each day and I want to run away,
Away from this world of cruelty and shame,
And I think of the joy that our world could have,
If we all stop this madness and never forget that in God's eyes,

we are all the Same.

I feel you in the morning
When at first I awake
Your thought is with me
With each decision I make

You'd been around forever
Since the first breath I took
Now I have to go on alone
But for love, I need not look

Cause by what you bestowed
In our short time together
Will last in my heart
Forever and ever

Although you've left
And now walk above
I'm never alone
I'm wrapped in your love

Enjoy now your long waited reward
Feel peace that your love continues on
What was taught to me, will be taught to mine
Cause you live on in me even after you've gone

I never really knew you
You were just another friend
But when I got to know you,
I let my heart unbend.
I couldn't help past memories
that would only make me cry
I had to forget my first love
and give love another try
So I've fallen in love with you
and I'll never let you go
I love you more than anyone
I just had to let you know
And if you ever wonder why
I don't know what I'll say
But I'll never stop loving you
each and every day
My feelings for you will never change
Just know my feelings are true
Just remember one thing
I Love You!

i hope you like them:):)
08-07-2009, 01:41 PM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by antonio

these poems i wrote are for life(this you cant vote)

I don't understand why they treat us this way,
We are not that different, inside were all the same,
We should not be judged by our religion or the color of our face,
Because in the end, we're all running this same race,

I wake up each day and I want to run away,
Away from this world of cruelty and shame,
And I think of the joy that our world could have,
If we all stop this madness and never forget that in God's eyes,

we are all the Same.

I feel you in the morning
When at first I awake
Your thought is with me
With each decision I make

You'd been around forever
Since the first breath I took
Now I have to go on alone
But for love, I need not look

Cause by what you bestowed
In our short time together
Will last in my heart
Forever and ever

Although you've left
And now walk above
I'm never alone
I'm wrapped in your love

Enjoy now your long waited reward
Feel peace that your love continues on
What was taught to me, will be taught to mine
Cause you live on in me even after you've gone

I never really knew you
You were just another friend
But when I got to know you,
I let my heart unbend.
I couldn't help past memories
that would only make me cry
I had to forget my first love
and give love another try
So I've fallen in love with you
and I'll never let you go
I love you more than anyone
I just had to let you know
And if you ever wonder why
I don't know what I'll say
But I'll never stop loving you
each and every day
My feelings for you will never change
Just know my feelings are true
Just remember one thing
I Love You!

i hope you like them:):)

wow,you are really good at this.this time 1>3>2
08-07-2009, 02:03 PM
antonio

all of us posted a quarter final poem except seagoddes so somebody has to tell here to write something or shes out(:() and the voting can START
08-07-2009, 02:09 PM
Noxide

I vote for Kimi Raikkonen!!:laugh::laugh:

Sorry.

I'll stop
08-07-2009, 02:14 PM
antonio

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noxide

I vote for Kimi Raikkonen!!:laugh::laugh:

Sorry.

I'll stop

:laugh::laugh::laugh::laugh::laugh::laugh:stop
08-07-2009, 03:42 PM
the_dead_man

What's the prize money?
08-07-2009, 03:59 PM
SeaGoddess

The deepest fog covered the land
Night was slowly reigning over.
Darkness blesses with his hand
The old, forgotten harbor.

A ghostlike ship arrives at shore,
The sand embraced it quickly
At distance, an evasive roar
Was echoing... yet scarcely.

It was a lonely soul unarmed
Calling an ancient name:
Forget your hopes, they'll do you harm
Your fate will prove the same...

Sorry for the delay, the creation process requires time...
08-07-2009, 04:23 PM
antonio

Quote:

Originally Posted by the_dead_man

What's the prize money?

10-20 rep for 1 st place

7-10 2nd place

5-7 3rd place:)
08-07-2009, 04:24 PM
antonio

the voting booth is OPENNNN!!!!!:wow: :wow: :wow: :wow: :wow:
08-07-2009, 04:26 PM
antonio

i rate 8/10 for seagoddess because the low drama in the poem(sorry):)
08-07-2009, 04:29 PM
SeaGoddess

I rate 8/10 yours. I'm not moved by love poems. Sorry
08-07-2009, 04:40 PM
antonio

Quote:

Originally Posted by SeaGoddess

I rate 8/10 yours. I'm not moved by love poems. Sorry

dont worry:):):)
08-07-2009, 04:42 PM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by SeaGoddess

The deepest fog covered the land
Night was slowly reigning over.
Darkness blesses with his hand
The old, forgotten harbor.

A ghostlike ship arrives at shore,
The sand embraced it quickly
At distance, an evasive roar
Was echoing... yet scarcely.

It was a lonely soul unarmed
Calling an ancient name:
Forgot your hopes, they'll do you harm
Your fate will prove the same...

Sorry for the delay, the creation process requires time...

I think "Forget" will be more suited to the penultimate line.
Anyway,it has almost the same theme as the previous one,but a good one nonetheless,so 8/10.
08-07-2009, 04:46 PM
SeaGoddess

Thanks, it was an honest mistake :)
08-07-2009, 04:48 PM
rivster

Antonio's last poem struck me as great and the other two as good.Overall,I think he deserves 8.5/10.I also think a neutral member should judge us (that is,excluding antonio,seagoddess and I).
08-07-2009, 04:49 PM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by SeaGoddess

Thanks, it was an honest mistake :)

You are welcome.
08-07-2009, 04:51 PM
SeaGoddess

Quote:

Originally Posted by rivster

Here's my edition:

Prelude to Life

On the seemingly endless path called life,
I trudge on,pursuing goodness;
Into turbulent waters,I dive,
Avoiding the unvarnished truth with a defiant face.

I know nothing of the truth I avoid,
Neither do I understand it's purpose;
I assure you,it can't be found in any tabloid,
It is not even known by the wise carcass.

Why,oh why can't I comprehend life's circle?
Why,oh why can't I figure out my purpose here?
All I know is that I have to trudge on with a story to tell,
and turn a blind eye to life's leer.

There,that's my entry.

Rhyme suffers. Anyway, I love what you express. 8/10
08-07-2009, 04:57 PM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by SeaGoddess

Rhyme suffers. Anyway, I love what you express. 8/10

Thanks a lot!
08-07-2009, 05:34 PM
antonio

Quote:

Originally Posted by rivster

Here's my edition:

Prelude to Life

On the seemingly endless path called life,
I trudge on,pursuing goodness;
Into turbulent waters,I dive,
Avoiding the unvarnished truth with a defiant face.

I know nothing of the truth I avoid,
Neither do I understand it's purpose;
I assure you,it can't be found in any tabloid,
It is not even known by the wise carcass.

Why,oh why can't I comprehend life's circle?
Why,oh why can't I figure out my purpose here?
All I know is that I have to trudge on with a story to tell,
and turn a blind eye to life's leer.

There,that's my entry.

a solid 9.5/10 it was perfect but i personaly whould change the end:):)
08-07-2009, 05:37 PM
antonio

THE SEMIFINALISTS ARE:

1-rivster with 9.5

2-antonio(me)with 8.5

3-seagoddes with8.0

whoooooo hoooooooooo:wow::wow::wow::wow:
08-07-2009, 05:47 PM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by antonio

a solid 9.5/10 it was perfect but i personaly whould change the end:):)

WOW!!Thanks.and could you tell me how you would end it?Maybe,I could incorporate it in my next one.
What did you think of my suggestion of letting a neutral member judge our poems?
08-07-2009, 05:54 PM
antonio

Quote:

Originally Posted by rivster

WOW!!Thanks.and could you tell me how you would end it?Maybe,I could incorporate it in my next one.
What did you think of my suggestion of letting a neutral member judge our poems?

a very good sugestion but to late sorry :(:(:( we have the semi finalists
08-07-2009, 05:58 PM
rivster

Quote:

Originally Posted by antonio

a very good sugestion but to late sorry :(:(:( we have the semi finalists

ok,no problem.
08-07-2009, 06:31 PM
the_dead_man

Quote:

Originally Posted by antonio

10-20 rep for 1 st place

7-10 2nd place

5-7 3rd place:)

that's boring... besides who is going to give the rep, moreover me and my brother here give 15 and 17 rep at a time so its not much of a prize really in my opinion...
08-07-2009, 06:34 PM
James

Quote:

Originally Posted by the_dead_man

that's boring... besides who is going to give the rep, moreover me and my brother here give 15 and 17 rep at a time so its not much of a prize really in my opinion...

You give 15 now? :o I still only give 13.
08-07-2009, 06:37 PM
the_dead_man

Quote:

Originally Posted by James

You give 15 now? :o I still only give 13.

yeah, just repped you, check it:cool:
08-07-2009, 06:38 PM
Noxide

We work in harmony...
13,15,17:laugh::laugh:
08-07-2009, 06:39 PM
the_dead_man

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noxide

We work in harmony...
13,15,17:laugh::laugh:

arithmetic progression:o
08-07-2009, 06:41 PM
tekina

I think nox wanted to post "harmonic" progression.....:whistle:
08-07-2009, 06:42 PM
Noxide

Quote:

Originally Posted by the_dead_man

arithmetic progression:o

Quote:

Originally Posted by tekina

I think nox wanted to post "harmonic" progression.....:whistle:

Something like that.:laugh::laugh:
08-07-2009, 06:44 PM
tekina

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noxide

Something like that.:laugh::laugh:

see, im always right :cool:

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